Shirley Simmonds

photo Shirl,Tamihana,Raukawa

December: Ngā piki me ngā heke

One of the things that has happened as a part of this writing journey on the incubator is that I have found myself become part of a community I never even knew existed.  There are online writing groups, Facebook groups, conferences and events around the country, competitions, publication launches, Te Hā Māori writers group, and Ngā Pou Kaituhi Māori for writers in te reo.  The more you participate in this community, the more it expands.  I feel like I’ve found a secret society.

It’s interesting (and sometimes a bit intimidating) to hear or read of other writers’ trials and errors, successes and knockbacks. One Facebook group asked members to post a picture of their desk to share. Up popped a stream of neat, orderly desks (did they tidy them before the picture?) mine is more like a nest.

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Somewhere beneath a pile of random books and bills to pay, photos of whānau and artwork by my boys, surrounded by chocolate wrappers and coffee cups is my laptop where everything happens.  Or, admittedly, sometimes doesn’t happen.  Last year I painted my office “Khaleesi Blue”.  Resene had another name for this colour, but Game of Thrones fans will understand.  The idea was that the room would “bring out one’s inner Khaleesi” i.e. mine.  What I really like about the room is the view out the window.  Fruit trees, lots of green, and yes that’s right – piglets! (How do I concentrate on writing when there are piglets to tickle?)

shilrey-kuni-1shirley-kuni-2

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

That’s my youngest son, Raukawa.  I also painted a wall in this room with whiteboard paint, which has become my space for creative brainstorming, or ‘to do’ lists in an attempt at organising my life.  A place to jot key learnings from my mentor that I need to keep in mind while I write, like these:

shirley-wall

I need more tension.  I wrote a story this past week and I ‘think’ it had tension.  It focussed on the dynamics of relationships, hints at conflicts, a bit of mystery.  The ending was designed to keep the reader thinking – “did this happen? Or did that happen?”.  I asked someone to read it over for me, and she said yep, she definitely wanted to keep reading, so that’s a good sign. I’ve only just submitted it to Tina, so we’ll see what she thinks.

Meanwhile this month has been eventful for me and my boys.  We lost one of the rangatira in our whānau, and this has impacted us all quite significantly.  For this we have had trips back home to Pikitu, our marae, which is valuable whānau time, and a step in the process of healing the mamae of loss.  Raukawa got sick, and got sick fast which required a trip to A&E.  He’s okay now.  Then I got sick with a bug that meant I was good for nothing for a while and grateful that my boys’ big sister was here to take over parental duties while I was unable to move with the alternating chills and hot flushes of a freaky virus.  I’m okay now. In the midst of all this, Rūaumoko rumbled, Tāwhiri-mātea blew and Ranginui shed prolific tears.  Oh and there was a supermoon.

Life is full of tension.

But there are joys too.  Tamihana and Raukawa had their first stage kapa haka performance a couple of weeks ago, they have started waka ama recently which they love, and last week the kura came to visit our place for a farm experience – for which the weather didn’t oblige – but we managed to feed animals in between torrential rain showers, and eat copious amounts of wood-fired pizza.  Flowers are turning to fruit on the trees outside, piglets are growing and compost is composting.  In my spare time (such that it is) I’m bottling elderflower cordial, planting kamokamo seedlings and harvesting garlic, blue peas and strawberries.  Life is full, and I am evermore finding places where writing fits into this full life.

Mauriora ki a tātou.

 


November: Time, Space, Place

I’m starting to gain a new appreciation of Time.  Of course I never had enough of it already, but the other day I lost three hours and gained a paragraph.  I thought it was quite a nice paragraph, but still.  Ultimately it may yet be cut out during an edit of this particular story, and then pooff! there goes those three hours.  Even if it stays in the story, it would only take the reader a matter of seconds to read it, and that is my next realisation:  the time it takes to write a piece of writing is not the same as the time it takes to read a piece of writing (lightbulb moment).  There’s probably a mathematical equation for it that uses terminology like ‘inversely proportional to’ or ‘exponential’.  I used to like maths.

In my attempt to let go of adjectives I’m making my verbs work harder.  Such as replacing: walked with other alternatives like: ambled, strolled, marched, meandered and so on.  It removes the temptation to use a nasty adverb after ‘walked’. I’ve also discovered that there are ‘telling’ adjectives and ‘showing’ adjectives.  For example:

(a) perfect eyebrows (telling)

(b) vs sculpted eyebrows (showing)

In example (b) you can picture these eyebrows, they are carefully plucked, perhaps waxed by a beautician.  They are arched and the edges of each eyebrow are clear and distinct and not blurred by forgotten stubble and regrowth.  The hair of the eyebrow has been brushed with one of those tiny brushes, perhaps they are also tinted or outlined with an expensive eyebrow pencil to further define them.

So much image from one word.  Which makes me realise the importance of the Space between the words.  Or the words written in white font between the words in black font – the ones that the writer didn’t actually write, but the reader will read because the reader will fill in the space.

When I first started out on this hīkoi, I remember Tina saying something like: “…trust the reader, let the reader bring their imagination to the table, let them engage with the story…” and it makes sense.  I’m still working at showing, not telling.  I think it’s a whakamana process, you are acknowledging what the reader is bringing to the story, and allowing it to happen.  When you ‘tell’ something, you remove the mana of the words gone before.

At the Te Hā Māori Writer’s hui last month, presenters talked about writing from the white hot Place inside you.  Writing with passion and feeling.  I’ve come to realise that everything I’ve ever written has been inspired by a truth and based in reality.  That writing was also a kind of cathartic process so it definitely came onto the page with passion and feeling.  That’s perhaps also why it had never been shared before, because it has been intensely personal.  Now I’m writing fiction and I need to get past this feeling that I’m telling lies because that, by definition, is what fiction is.   It’s made up.  I need to let go of that feeling, and still tap into the white hot place, however sometimes I feel like I still –

Can’t.

Quite.

Let go.

 


October: Journal Four

I have two photos of my koro that I just love. At the beginning of Te Papa Tupu, I put them in frames on the wall next to my desk.

The photos are taken at the front of the kāuta at our marae, Pikitu. It’s about 1965. Koro is telling a story while they all wait for the hangi stones to heat. Seated in a circle around him are his avid listeners – sons, nephews, nieces, brothers. My dad is in this group. When I look at their faces, the words “enraptured” and “captivated” come to my mind. Koro is in the throes of his tale, and he’s telling it with his entirety.

When I look at the pictures, I wish I was there. I wish I’d heard the story, wish I’d heard the punchline, wish I’d been there for the outburst of laughter at the end.

My koro passed away when I was seven, and the first story I ever remember writing was when I was in fourth form and it was about his death.

Tina says the pattern of a story is imprinted in our DNA. I hope so. This month I’ve gotten to a stage where everything feels very messy – stories have gone back and forth to Tina for feedback and revisions, exercises sent through for comments and suggestions. I’ve learnt a lot of new strategies and techniques, and am working at putting them into practice – they’re not automatic, I have to think at each step of the way. Nothing yet is polished or completed, I’m having bouts of self-doubt, and in order to stop the slightly panicky feeling of time slipping by, I find I need to remind myself often that there are still some months to go. I’m meeting with Tina this week, so I know this will help to recalibrate.

One thing I do know is that Te Papa Tupu is helping me in other areas of my mahi. I feel my writing is more focussed. I whipped out three abstracts for a conference in record time a few weeks ago, typed up a research proposal in little more than one evening recently and also submitted for a ‘storytelling’ category in a Public Health conference that I wouldn’t have otherwise considered doing. Somehow I’ve written a couple of poems – something that hasn’t really happened since high school.

Oh, and I’m going to the National Māori Writers’ hui this weekend. I’m looking forward to being inspired and re-energised.

Mauriora ki a koutou

  Shirley Koro 1 shirley-koro2

 

 

 

 

 


September: A list of lists

List Number One: What I have learned this month

1.   I tend more towards writing anecdotes rather than stories;

2.   There’s a difference between an anecdote and a story;

3.   I need to be writing stories;

4.   It can take longer to do a review of a story than it took to write the story in the first place;

5.   My idea of reviewing a story was different from Tina’s;

6.   Sometimes reviewing a story means taking an entirely new, fresh page;

7.   Composting and pruning don’t happen only in the garden!

 

List Number Two: Mantras

I am developing a collection of brief mottos that help encompass some of my learnings from Tina, and keep me focused on what I need to focus on.

1.   Be specific.

2.   Don’t tell it, show it.

3.   Build tension.

4.   Go deeper.

Tina gave me some writing tasks to do. Just like one might go to the gym for body exercises, I sit at the keyboard for writing exercises. They are a challenge, and push me out of my natural way of thinking about writing, which means that sometimes a writing gym workout might go like this:

type,type,delete,delete,delete

type,type,type,delete

type,delete,delete,delete

typetypetypetypetypetypetype

[selectall] delete

Aargh!

As you can imagine, it’s hard to reach a 1,000 word average daily goal when this is happening. I’ve heard it said several times that:

1.   No-one cares about your first draft;

2.   Just get it down on paper;

3.   You can always change it afterwards.

(That was List Number Three by the way) I’ve realised that I do actually care about my first draft. I spend 90% of my time thinking and planning and mentally drafting for every 10% of time actual writing. One of my strategies for getting around this is to think about writing all of the time that I’m not actually writing, in order to increase that proportion of my day. It means that now I’m noticing life’s fine details, everything is profound, and suddenly there’s another commentary going on. I no longer simply ‘walk into the kitchen’, instead; ‘I pause, hand on the kitchen door, heart pounding and every nerve jangling. I take a deep breath and enter to face … the dishes mountain!’ for example. And a conversation with a friend entails noticing every gesture, every nuance of expression, every tone and inflection and I barely control saying ‘she said’ or ‘I said’ after everything that, er, she said or I said.  Do writers do this all the time?

The other strategy brings me to my final list which has just one item in it (does that still make it a list?). It’s not original, it’s been said before. However, here it is, List Number Four:

1.   Just write.

Mauriora

 


August: Journal Two

I am officially one week into the writing incubator (having had a delayed start) and this week I am learning to “cut the fat”. I’ve come to realise that I have a love of adjectives. They are just so … descriptive. But many of these will have to go.

I thought I might not like this process – to cut and trim and pare away at the words, but actually my overall feeling is that I’m both interested and curious to see what is revealed. I liken it, I guess, to a sculptor or a kaiwhakairo … perhaps they start with a block of tōtara, or Oamaru stone and do a rough cut first to get an overall impression of the final carving, step back, take a good long look, think, then reach for a different tool to finely carve the detail, to hone and shape until a point of satisfaction and completion.

Tina’s guidance has equipped me with this tool, now I just need to practice using it. I look forward to the day when I can sit back with the printouts of two stories:  the one I started off with in one hand, and the finished product in the other.

I have also been recommended to read-read-read … what luxury! My relationship with reading has fluctuated over the course of my life. A voracious reader as a child, this changed somewhat throughout university years as reading was no longer for pleasure, but for an academic purpose. Then I got busy with ‘life’ and travelled and studied and had dramas and relationships and work and children etcetera, and reading became an intermittent indulgence, or something that happened on a train, a long-haul flight, or in the last exhausted moments of the day only to result in sleeping with a book on my face or embedded in my cheek.

Now I am reading for both pleasure and a purpose. I have a new lens for perusing short stories.  I am absorbing the rhythm and shape of the tale, exploring techniques, and observing strategies used.  And what an absolute treat it is to be doing this – to be devouring these books without any sense of ‘guilt’, or ‘I should be doing somethiSteph booksng else’ because actually this is exactly what I should be doing, and Te Papa Tupu has provided that space.

Patricia Grace – she’s legend.  I’m revisiting stories I haven’t read since school, and have discovered several I’ve never read. My bedside table looks like this, really it does.
Hei tērā mārama koutou katoa.

 

 

 

 

 


July: Journal One

I am many things … I am a mother, a gardener, a teacher, a researcher, a facilitator, an evaluator …

But am I a writer?

I am a Māori, I am Ngāti Huri, I am a friend, a lover, a colleague, a workmate …

But am I a writer?

I am a sister, an aunty, a daughter, a stepmother, a woman, a scientist …

I wrote some short stories, does that make me a writer?

I’m sometimes inspired to put down my thoughts, my ideas, my experiences onto paper, to offload, to express, to purge. In May 2016 I gathered these strewn thoughts, drew them together and shaped them into four short stories and with trepidation, apprehension, exhilaration and daring I pressed the entry button on the Huia website, Te Papa Tupu Writing Incubator.

And so here I am, July 2016, on the verge of a journey. An egg for the incubator.

And it’s not without apprehension that I enter into this journey. I wonder what will come of it. I wonder if I can do it. I fear that there will be times that inspiration doesn’t flow, that I might sit at my laptop, fingers poised and then freeze, that I might open my notebook, pencil poised and nothing springs forth. That I might start a story and not know how it finishes. I wonder how I’ll manage critique of my work, having to change or delete words and paragraphs that I so painstakingly crafted.

Most of all I wonder how I will cope with baring elements of my soul for all to read.

However.

I’m putting these apprehensions to the side, they are there sure enough, but I’m going to re-focus that energy into creative energy and put my everything into these next six months, because I really am interested to see what will come of it, and because I know that this is an amazing opportunity, a golden opportunity – or better still, a pounamu opportunity.

I am looking forward to the creative vent.

I have a wonderful mentor, whose writing I admire, who is inspiring, who I can relate to. We have a delay to our start of the journey as mentor and mentee … with a start date in early August. That’s fine by me as it gives me an extra month to draw in a deep breath. Hā ki roto.

Writing … will this become one of the things that defines who I am?

Am I a writer?

Mā te wā ka kite.

Ask me again in February 2017

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